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Friday 8 September
Finally, it's Friday! I can't believe the first week is coming to an end.Things are going well, but there is always something new just around the corner.
At junior high, I took lots of notes during class.So in physics class on Monday, I did the same, but the teacher spoke so fast that I couldn't take everything down.The teacher found I was struggling with notetaking and told me to stop and just listen.“Thinking is a more important ability than notetaking and memorising，” he said.
After class on Wednesday, I hurried to the school skateboarding club.I was running out of the classroom when I bumped into a girl literally.I said sorry to her and she smiled at me.At the club, I had my first try at skateboarding and fell off the board a lot.Suddenly, a girl bumped into me — the same girl from the corridor! This time, both of us laughed.Her name is Sarah.We started to practise together and soon became friends.
I'm going to watch a film with Sarah tomorrow evening.I'm looking forward to it！
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[学语言]
本篇日记主要记录了作者开学第一周在学校学习、交友的经历。时态上，作者首先采用现在时，然后运用过去时，采用倒叙的方式以及使用词语can't believe表达了作者感叹时间的流逝。
用词上，作者使用struggle，hurry，bump等词，表达更加准确、形象。
衔接方面，作者恰当使用but，so等连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡。
表达上，作者使用了较多高级表达方式，如：So in physics class on Monday, I did the same, but the teacher spoke so fast that I couldn't take everything down.以及I was running out of the classroom when I bumped into a girl literally.等显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色 添彩。
[学结构]
结构上，全文采用总—分—总结构；以时间(Friday→Monday→Wednesday→tomorrow evening)为线索，使全文结构更加清晰、明确。第一段中，作者使用but将本段一分为二，前半部分感叹时间之快，后半部分使用around the corner表达对未来的期待，恰好与最后一段的look forward to形成呼应。
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